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Part II: Prewriting
List 5 events of significance in your life. List 5 moments that last no more than 5 minutes where you had an aha or you didn't realize at the time the significance.

significant events 1. first time I rode a bike 2. first piano concert 3. first day of school in Korea 4. moving to my new house 5. sledding down my stairs

aha moments 1. trying to open a door the wrong way 2. miley cirus and justin beieber suck so much they changed my musical perspective 3. fireworks hurt 4. homework is boring 5. I really dont want to do this

1. When I was 6 years old I attempted to ride a bicycle. It was very hard and I fell down many times. I tried and tried and tried and kept falling down. I often thought about quitting, but seeing my dad and oder brother ride their bike and me just sitting there like an idiot really made me want to ride one too. So my dad got trainer wheels and I practiced like that for a couple weeks, after that he took them off and got one of those support bars that you attach to the back and have someone hold it so you don't fall down. After many tries, I finally rode the bike without any help and I was able to ride with my family. I occasionally crashed into a sign or trash can but everything else was fine.

2. Maybe 1 month ago, I watched a video called "One Time" because it was the free video of the week on iTunes. At first it looked like some normal 15-17 year old boy, but then when I heard his voice I thought he was a girl. It was seriously one of the worst songs I've ever heard. It changed my thoughts about the music industry these days. If they are releasing stuff like this now, what will happen in 5 years? Miley Cirus also drives me crazy. There are a million parties in the U.S.A. why does she have to sing about it? Her lyrics make no sense and on top of that they are extremely annoying. If I hear their music, I actually get headaches.

Choose one of the events and add setting and dialogue. (1)

When I was 6 years old I attempted to ride a bicycle in my suburban town called Webster, NY. It was very hard and I fell down many times onto the hard ground or into a muddy puddle wear dirt was stuffed into my nose forcing me to inhale an awful stench. I had many scrapes and bruises that ached every time I moved. I tried and repeatedly kept falling down. I often thought about quitting, but seeing my dad and older brother ride their bike and me just sitting there like an idiot really made me want to ride one too. So my dad got trainer wheels and I practiced like that for a couple weeks, I told him many times, "This is boring." So he took them off and got one of those support bars that you attach to the back and have someone hold it so you don't fall down. After many tries, I finally rode the bike without any help and I was able to ride with my family. I occasionally crashed into a sign or trash can but everything else was fine.

Choose an event (either the ones you brainstormed with or another one) and answer the following questions: What is the thesis? Riding a bike What is the significance (one sentence)? I finally got to ride my bike and have fun with my family What is the setting? Webster, NY

12/9/09 My incredibly stupid short story

Austin Yoo likes lobsters. Breaking their claws makes him very happy. Cooking them also brings joy to Austin. Dashingly, he cleans, cooks, eats them. Evolution has caused lobsters to have claws. Friday is the day he buys them. Grapes are Austin’s favorite fruit. He eats them alive. Illinois is Austin’s home state, so there aren’t very good lobsters there.

Jamaica is the place where Austin spent his vacation at. Kaka’s were for sale everywhere. Love made Austin move to Jamaica permanently. Monday is when he starts work. Never shall he be poor. Optimism is the key to being happy, it even says so in the book Candide. Proud of his new life, Austin started out for work. Questioning his every action, was his boss. Raining hard outside, Austin went for a walk. Street lights buzzed in the rain, cars slipped down the wet roads, birds flew noisily in the dark sky, people walked quickly to get to places. Taxis honked obnoxiously.

Up in the sky, he saw planes. Very strongly, he started to cry. While he cried, he slipped and fell down. Xylophones played in the background. Yogurt flew! Zig-zagging into his face.



I LOVE YOUR LAST PAGE. 4/5

SHORT AND TO THE POINT. MAYBE JUST A LITTLE MORE. 3/5





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Nurse 1.3.101 - She will only grow by men. -- WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? ALSO, BENVIOLIO IS BEING MORE SPECIFIC THAN WHAT YOU MENTION. JULIET IS NOT REJECTING LOVE, JUST HASN'T THOUGHT ABOUT IT. 4/5 NEED TO GO FURTHER IN YOUR OUTLINE. THIS IS WHAT WE READ IN CLASS. WHAT ABOUT THE SECTION YOU WERE ASSIGNED FOR HOMEWORK? 2/5

I am reading __A Single Shard__ by Linda Sue Park. She was born in Urbana, Illinois, and grew up outside Chicago. Her parents are Korean. She wrote A Single Shard witch won a Newberry Medal. This book takes place in Chul’po Korea during the 12 century, and its about a Korean orphan who wants to be a potter. WHY DID YOU CHOOSE IT? WORK ON EXPANDING. 3/5 Revision of Rough Draft TO WHOSE PAPER ARE YOU REFERRING or WHO WAS YOUR PARTNER?

WORLD LITERATURE PROPOSAL? UNLESS I HAVE IT IN HARD COPY.

Comments for your podcast about - A single shard

John Jung- I thought you really tried to make the time longer. You spoke slowly and which made some advantages and some disadvantages. By speaking slowly and correctly it made your speech much more clear and accurate. However, it made me a bit sleepy and boring. Still, I thought it was a good podcast and it made me want to read the book.'

Andrew- You Speak tooooooo slooowwwwwww. The good thing is that your slow speaking skills allowed me to clearly understand what you are saying. The bad thing is that it was lacking of interest. I personally like it though.