REVSING+S+ROUGHDRAFT+by+Joshua

**//What did the author do well overall?//** //The informations was gathered very organized. Idea was very clear.// **//What could the author improve overall?//** //This essay should be written in the first point of view (POV of Shakespeare's)// **//Ideas and Content://** **//1. Does the author clearly state the main idea of the paper in the first paragraph?//** **// What is the main idea?//** //It is very vague, but it shows what the authors going to talk about.// **//2. Do the middle paragraphs develop / gives examples to support the topic / main ideas?//** **// Does each supporting paragraph develop one idea or example?//** **// Do any paragraphs need clarification or expansion?//** //Everything on the body is very nicely written because all the ideas are clearly stated and divided. There are actual facts that are stated in between the phrases for factual support.// **//3. Does the ending bring the paper to a satisfactory close?//** **// Explain how the ending works or does not work://** //His ending is not very satisfactory because there is no concluding sentences but facts.// **//Organization://** **//1. Are there any parts of the paper that should be reordered? Explain://** //This essay is well ordered, but the facts should be more organized.// **//2. Do the transitions in the paper work? Is there an over use of “and, so, but, then, or”?//** //the transitioning words (conjunctions) and properly used.// **//Sentence Fluency://** //1. Are there rambling and/or confusing sentences? Fix two and put a star next to the two you improved.// //There are no fluency problems because it was very comfortable to read.// //2. Does the author use a variety of sentence lengths? Attempt to combine some sentences using a semi-colon or a comma and coordinating conjunction.// //Yes, he used lots of semi-Collins and commas.// **//Citing Sources://** //1.// **//Highlight all the in-text citations No in-text citations!//** //2. Does the author use in-text citations for any information that is not common knowledge or is a direct quotation? yes// //3. Are there any sentences or sections that don’t sound like the author’s work? Fix these or cite these as necessary. Don’t be a plagiarist! she's not a plagiarist! :) he marked and gave credit to all the authors.// //4. Does the author have a works cited list in MLA format? Check the wiki for links to MLA citation information. She needs a works cited list in MLA format.// 
 * //Revising (not editing) using the 6-traits://**