JANECREVIEW

What did the author do well overall? The author did well telling the audience about different facts about the theatre in a fun way. What could the author improve overall? The author could look over their grammar and tenses. **Ideas and Content:** 1. Does the author clearly state the main idea of the paper in the first paragraph? No  What is the main idea? There is none Explain why the main idea is or is not clear: Because the paper was written in a story form. 2. Do the middle paragraphs develop / gives examples to support the topic / main ideas? Does each supporting paragraph develop one idea or example? Do any paragraphs need clarification or expansion? There are no middle paragraphs that develop the topic because the paper is written in a story form. 3. Does the ending bring the paper to a satisfactory close? Explain how the ending works or does not work: Ending should be a little more detailed, but generally it works because it serves as falling action after the climax. **Organization:** 1. Are there any parts of the paper that should be reordered? Explain: The paper is ordered in chronological order, so it's fine. 2. Do the transitions in the paper work? Is there an over use of “and, so, but, then, or”? There are transitions in the work that make it easier to follow. **Sentence Fluency:** 1. Are there rambling and/or confusing sentences? Fix two and put a star next to the two you improved. Okay :) 2. Does the author use a variety of sentence lengths? Attempt to combine some sentences using a semi-colon or a comma and coordinating conjunction.  Commas are used to vary sentence lengths. Okay.  **Citing Sources:**  1. **Highlight all the in-text citations**  2. Does the author use in-text citations for any information that is not common knowledge or is a direct quotation? There aren't any in-text citations.  3. Are there any sentences or sections that don’t sound like the author’s work? Fix these or cite these as necessary. Don’t be a plagiarist! The work sounds pretty original to me.  4. Does the author have a works cited list in MLA format? Check the wiki for links to MLA citation information. Nope, not yet!
 * Revising (not editing) using the 6-traits:**