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Jan 14th: correcting sentences 1. Brendan didn't't want anything returned but __Time__ and __Sports Illustrated__, the two magazines that he gave to them students. 2. The pipe burst opened during the morning; during the afternoon, Dad found a plumber to repair it.

Jan 8th: editing Joe's DOL It was cold: there was a lot of snow. I had a lot of fun. I am sad; I didn't get many presents, and my brother didn't get much either. PC bong, sledding, talking are activities that I did.

- It was freezing: there was snow everywhere. I had entertaining days. However, I am gloomy; I didn't get many presents, and my adorable brother didn't get much either. PC bang, sledding, talking are activities that I enjoyed.

January 6th : holiday events

- Monday was snowy day!; Tuesday, chilly; Wednesday, school day.(pattern 2) My best friend and I went to play soccer; Our jeans were soaked and frozen but we kept on fooling around.(pattern 1) I amazingly got my friend in the head with a snow ball from 100meters apart, making him shocked, laugh, enraged.(pattern 4) After we came back home, we had a nice cup of hot drink to sooth our frozen throats: cappuccino latte.(p1attern 3)

The children gathered around their teacher, crying, complaining, screaming. Tired, cheered, exited, the winner left the stadium feeling great.
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Exercises 1&2 1. An essay traditionally has three major parts: introduction, body, conclusion. 2. Hamburgers, Hotdogs, Pizzas are my favorite foods.

Editing: 1. Three diamonds! Each worth three thousand pistoles! Sir, I would lay my life down for you sooner than throw you in the dungeon. - This creates good flow, because 'sir' is calling somebody, thus need a comma to give more voice. - simple sentence 2. There are orders to arrest all foreigners hereabouts, but leave it to me. - It is a command, so there should be a comma. - compound sentence 3. I have a brother in Dieppe, in Normandy; I will take you there; and if you have any diamonds for him, he will look after you as if he were looking after me. (semi-colons as well as a comma or two) - The second clause is what is going to happen because of the first clause. Also, it says what is going to happen, thus is a listing of events. - Pattern 1 4. The abbe now spoke up: "It's because an imbecile from Arras listened to some fookish talk, which was enough to make him go and commit parricide --- not like what happened in May 1610, but like . . ." - The talking part needs more voice, so I put some more commas in the sentence. - compound sentence

Paraphrasing: The three patterns are not three ways we could punctuate sentences. They all have unique characteristics. The first pattern has to make two related statements on a same idea: this pattern bonds two sentences you don't want to separate. Pattern two makes ellipsis to be possible: this pattern makes the second clause imply specific words from the first clause but not stated. Pattern three is explaining of the idea: the second clause emphasizes or explains the first clause, remember that you can only use colon when the two clauses are closely related.

Exercise 1&2 pg.17: 1. All of the students studied hard for the math test; the students all got A's on their papers. 2. The dot-com companies have changed the work week: the workers have to come 6 days a week.

November 12: a. Thought is the blossom language; the bud action, the fruit. -- Ralph Waldo Emerson b. Sam walks quickly and sprightly to the store; Yunji, lackadaisically. Two sentences using Pattern 2 about Candide a. Cunegonde is loved by Candide; the King, by men. b. King is very fat; Cunegonde, very attractive.

Pattern 2: exercise 3&4 3. Antarctica and Arctic are white; Ireland and Scotland, much greener. (Austin Yoo checked) 4. All the children want to go to McDanalds's for lunch; Adults, to Berger King. (Austin Yoo checked)

Pattern 1: group two The tiger seems restless; He is really big, so he should have more room.

Pattern 1: group one The girl looks happy, because she has a new car; her brother has one too.

--- THE ART OF STYLING SENTENCES ---

Day 23: Write a paragraph about what you read last night in Romeo and Juliet. Include in the paragraph at least three of the following: a. comma with an introductory clause b. semi-colon c. appositive d. underlining or italicizing or quotation of title Yesterday, I read about the ending of //Romeo and Juliet//. Juliet pretends to 'die'. Romeo recieves the news that Juliet died because of an accident. Surprised, Romeo buys a poison and runs to Juliet's tomb. Romeo meets Paris in the tomb, they fight, and Paris gets killed. Romeo, left Paris's body next to Juliet, and drank the poison. Juliet wakes up and looks at Romeo; shocked Juliet kills herself with Romeo's dagger. The Capulets and Montagues, morning about their death, have a peace statue. The prince says that this is the most tragic event he'll ever see.

Day 22: 1. We put a adverb in the front, we have to put a comma. -Until morning, Jack had to finish his project. 2. You italicize the name of a book or movie. -I read //the Kite Runner// during the summer break, and it was amazing. 3. Single- I am not a female. Double- I do not have no female traits. <- This is bad 4. If it says who's mom it was, you don't capitalize it. -In the morning, Mom went to the supermarket. -My mom and I went to the supermarket. 5. all right vs. alright //regardless vs. irregardless// alot vs. a lot alright is incorrectly spelled all right. - "I got the questions all right!" irregardless is an informal way of saying it- Regardless of his broken arm, David still played tennis with his left hand. alot is 'a lot' spelled incorrectly - A lot of students hate doing homework. 6. The car Farrari, first made around 1526, is considered one of the finest quality racing cars. 7. Commas with an appositive with the proper noun second 8. Enunciation -- should have rather than should of

Day 17 1. "Sgt. Spriker, is it all right to assume that most of the Twenty-seventh division personnel are from Busan? "

2. After you have drawn a map showing the route from Coleridge Ave. to Highway 52, you may continue reading //Romeo and Juliet//.

Day 16 ** 1. "Has Mother spoken to Kevin about concerning an article in the magazine //Outdoor Life// about camping in the Catskills Mountains?"

2. No one in my family has went to the art museum in Chicago and seen Picasso's painting //the Blue Guitarist.// **

Day 15 1. We went to Brendan's house, on Forty-sixth Avenue for the October party.

2. The portrait //Mona Lisa// painted, around 1503, is considered the best painting that Da Vinci completed.

Day 14: copy to DOL page - 1. Their dog had bitten several Mail Carriers, don't you think his owners would do well by keeping him chained?

2. By the way, the boat //Roman III// which sank two years ago; wasn't it located over there?

Dear Diary My heart has fallen for the shining star from the sky. She is my only love and will be my only love. Why is the heavens being so rough to me? Turned out that my love is the descendant from the Capulet! I will break the angers between the famiy to get my girl. I shall suceed. **SPELLING. NICE FIRST LINE. GOOD FOCUS ON THE THEME OF THE FAMILIES.**
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 * 1. Journal Writing -- Write a diary entry from the perspective of Romeo, Juliet, or Tybalt about the evening. Take on their personality.**

Day 11 (sonnets) Sonnet
 * One of the forms of poetry. It has a rhyme scheme and unique structure. It is the main form in Shakespeare's poems.(ABABCDCDEFEFGG structure, 14 line, 10 syllables in each line)

The sonnet in the book is pg.57 line 104~117

Day 10 (Journal Entry) My Book : The Kite Runner I like the book so far and I think that one of the main character is going to get bullied. I think that book will show how two friends split and the main character's family conflicts. I wonder how The friend finds where the kite is going to land every time. I wish the Taliban shows up quickly and cause more interesting conflicts. **TALIBAN WON'T BE A LARGE PART OF THE BOOK, SORRY. BUT I KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN. I WAS INTERESTED IN THE FRIENDSHIP AT THE BEGINNING OF THE BOOK, BUT I ALSO WANTED TO KNOW WHEN THE ACTION WOULD START.**

Day 9 (we skipped a day): 1. "Aren't their a lot of quoted passages in your paragraph Richard?" 2. Since the students sold many pizzas, the trip won't cost them as much.

Day 7: Write a sentence with choler and augment. Jack's choleric attitude augmented to Jay's bad mood. **WAS AUGMENTED BY (BETTER WORDING)**

1. Since you are late finishing the job, you'll have to give the boys the video games to take to hyun sun's house.

2. My Sister doesn't always have time to visit us on our birthdays, but she does send presents.

1. "The play //Romeo and Juliet// was written by Shakespeare," Jin hee stated, "it is considered one of the poet's best".

2. "When will you teach me to how drive?" Austin asked in exasperated choleric intensity, "Must I wait for another six months?".

1. Terry rang the bell at the gatehouse, But when no one answered, he left in disgust.

2. My sister and I caught the bus at T//wenty second// and H//amil////ton Streets;// unfortunately, we got off of the bus two blocks too soon.