Narrative+Essay+MP

Yes, I agree with Ms. Porter, when she said "You could SHOW us a period of loathing rather than telling." on my narrative page. I actually debated this by myself for a while, during the process of writing my narrative. I thought that it would be great to add a paragraph, really showing the audience how much I originally hated my brother. However, I also didn't want to bore my audience. Now I know that I should go to my teacher when I have issues like that!!

I'm happy with the overall result of my narrative, however, maybe if i had more time, I would've been able to make it better!