DOLQ3+Jennifer+S.

April 22th, 2010  1) While I was looking at my grade I found something: an "A," the grade I really had worked for. 2) (Make up a sentence with a person's name as the emphatic appositive) I was unconsciously looking at him again : Edward Cullen. 3) The class elected our school's number one nerd as treasurer: Jim Rutledge 4) Every girls in the prom room knew that she would get that award: the "Prom Queen" award, the most coveted of all excellent distinctions.

April 19th, 2010  pg 51-52 ex 1, 2A, 2B 1) Your grandmother was right: there is nothing new under the sun, nothing new under the clouds, only the little chipmunk. 2a) But these numbers tell only part of the story, only the part where the main character heads towards the climax, only the part where the readers get anxious and excited, only the part where you would want to read the whole book. 2b) (Rewrite the sentence but this time repeat the word "part") But these numbers tell only part of the story, part which is dull, part which is unstimulating.

March 29th, 2010  1) If your teacher says to read it twice, if your friend says to write it twice, or if they both say to copy twice, you'd better follow your teacher's wishes rather than your friend's. 4) Whether you think that I'm weird or whether you think that I'm funny, you have no right to say anything. 5) The basketball couch shouted that the referee made the wrong decision, that the other team's coach wasn't suppose to jump into the court, and that the whole game was unfair. My sentence) When I play with my sisteun r, when I play with my friends, and when I play with my mother, I go to sleep at 4:00 am.

March 10th, 2010  Patterns 1-7: Both paragraphs listed below incorporate the patterns studied thus far, however, one of them uses the structures more effectively.


 * Greening buds, patches of mud, scattered puddles, a birth of color -- spring was on its way. Noel always found this season to be the ripest: thoughts of change and potential circulated through her body. But what made this spring more anticipated than the last? Perhaps it was the knowledge that she was going to be moving back home at the end of the school year. Or perhaps it was the warming air or extra chatter at home or one of a million other things. Whatever it was, she knew this spring was special; it really was going to be a season of change.


 * Greening buds, patches of mud, scattered puddles, a birth of color -- spring really was on its way. Noel always found this season to be the ripest: knowing of the changes that would soon be thrust upon her made her feel a certain tie to the fruit trees that were just beginning to show their blossoms. She too would be plucked from her current home and shipped off to some far off place. Her endpoint: Lincoln, Nebraska. The plum's endpoint: who knew. It could have been Nebraska or Melbourne or Brittany or Johanesburg. But this was not the first time she had started over on some other side of the world, and it certainly wouldn't be the last. She had learned to look for the small beauties amidst these times of transition, and she knew these harbingers of spring would always find her no matter where she moved.

1. Which would you say is better? Support your answer with specific instances from the text. I would say that the first paragraph is better because it's very simple and fluent compared to the second paragraph. I felt that the second paragraph had some unimportant patterns and sentences. For example, if you compare the first sentence of both paragraphs, you can see that the second paragraph already has the useless word "really" while the first paragraph simply said "spring was on its way." Also in the second paragraph, the sentence with the colon was just too long. After the colon, I think the sentence should be shortened.

2. With the paragraph you decided wasn't as good as the other, then make at least two changes to that paragraph which would improve it. Greening buds, patches of mud, scattered puddles, a birth of color -- spring was on its way. Noel always found this season to be the ripest: knowing of the changes that would soon be thrust upon her made her feel a certain tie to the fruit trees that were just beginning to show their blossoms. She too would be plucked from her current home and shipped off to some far off place. Her endpoint: Lincoln, Nebraska. The plum's endpoint: who knew. It could have been Nebraska, Melbourne, Brittany, or Johanesburg. But this was not the first time she had started over on some other side of the world, and it certainly wouldn't be the last. She had learned to look for the small beauties amidst these times of transition, and she knew these harbingers of spring would always find her no matter where she moved.

March 8, 2010  2) Bob and Minnie (my dog and cat) don't really fight when they are eating their food. 3) My favorite colors --- blue and brown --- always attract me to new clothes. 4) Learning the basic skills --- sportsmanship and strength --- will help me succeed in any sport. 5) The unexpected incident (plant shutdown) shocked the whole community.

March 3rd, 2010  1) Hardware, software, a modem-- are the most essential parts for a computer 2) Poetry and music, painting and sculpture, drama and dance --- all of them are related to performing arts or general arts. My own example) Eating, sleeping, playing--- these are the only things I want to do in my life.

February 10th, 2010 
 * Twenty-two students should have done the following: read "My Last Duchess" and the book //Candide,// and they should have written a ten page paper. (edited)

January 27th, 2010  pg 27 #1,2 1) I love apples, but I also like oranges and peaches and kiwis and mangoes. 2) My dad only played basketball, however when he got addicted to so many sports, he played soccer in spring, baseball in summer, football in fall, hockey in winter.

January 26th, 2010  pg 23 # 3,4,5

3) Thrilled, excited, relieved, the winner left the stadium feeling great. 4) The children gathered around their teacher, jumping, galloping, running. 5) When the game was cancelled, the rowdy spectators at the ball game, screamed, sobbed, yelled.