Revising+(not+editing)+using+the+6-traits

What did the author do well overall? Explains his the history of English.

What could the author improve overall? He needs to write in the point of view of Shakespeare

Ideas and Content:

1. Does the author clearly state the main idea of the paper in the first paragraph? What is the main idea? No. The main idea is Shakespeare's contributions to English. Explain why the main idea is or is not clear: It is unclear because in the first couple paragraphs, he talks about English and not Shakespeare.

2. Do the middle paragraphs develop / gives examples to support the topic / main ideas? Does each supporting paragraph develop one idea or example? Yes. Do any paragraphs need clarification or expansion? Yes, he needs to explain that this is from Shakespeare, not just explaining the history of English.

3. Does the ending bring the paper to a satisfactory close? Yes. Explain how the ending works or does not work: It talks about English, but not what Shakespeare did.

Organization:

1. Are there any parts of the paper that should be reordered? Explain: No, it's ok.

2. Do the transitions in the paper work? Is there an over use of “and, so, but, then, or”? Yes, and "and, so, but, then, or" was used.

Sentence Fluency:

1. Are there rambling and/or confusing sentences? Fix two and put a star next to the two you improved. No.

2. Does the author use a variety of sentence lengths? Attempt to combine some sentences using a semi-colon or a comma and coordinating conjunction. Yes.

Citing Sources:

1. Highlight all the in-text citations 2. Does the author use in-text citations for any information that is not common knowledge or is a direct quotation? No. 3. Are there any sentences or sections that don’t sound like the author’s work? Fix these or cite these as necessary. Don’t be a plagiarist! No. 4. Does the author have a works cited list in MLA format? Check the wiki for links to MLA citation information. No.