Revising+ShakespeareSARAHBOCK

Revising (not editing) using the 6-traits By Min Ji Kim

What did the author do well overall?

The author had a strong structure in the writing. For introduction, she grabs the audience's attention by stating if...then statement. The Body was well divided with each topic each.

What could the author improve overall? I do not see any grammar mistakes as well as the sentence that I could not understand.

Ideas and Content:

1. Does the author clearly state the main idea of the paper in the first paragraph? What is the main idea?

Yes, her main idea is well stated in the introduction. It was brief explanation about Shakespeare's laguage usage in his writings.

2. Do the middle paragraphs develop / gives examples to support the topic / main ideas?

In the writing, I can find different types of writing strategy and learn specifically about it.

3. Does the ending bring the paper to a satisfactory close?

Yes, it briefly summarizes the introduction and body.

Organization:

1. Are there any parts of the paper that should be reordered? Explain:

No! Unfortunatelly, it is perfectly organized.

2. Do the transitions in the paper work? Is there an over use of “and, so, but, then, or”?

All of the conjunctions are fairly used.

Sentence Fluency:

1. Are there rambling and/or confusing sentences? Fix two and put a star next to the two you improved.

No...! It is perfect. 2. Does the author use a variety of sentence lengths? Attempt to combine some sentences using a semi-colon or a comma and coordinating conjunction.

You may have no idea what certain words mean, like ‘bawling. It means small, but most people wouldn’t have recognized that.

You may have no idea what certain words mean; ‘bawling. It means small, but most people wouldn’t have recognized that.

Citing Sources:

1. Highlight all the in-text citations 2. Does the author use in-text citations for any information that is not common knowledge or is a direct quotation? No no 3. Are there any sentences or sections that don’t sound like the author’s work? Fix these or cite these as necessary. Don’t be a plagiarist! No No 4. Does the author have a works cited list in MLA format? Check the wiki for links to MLA citation information. Uhha yeah