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As I read my comments, I realized that many of my expressions were pretty good. I tried to use as many figurative language, and it seems that I succeeded throughout the book. As I read Ms. Porter's comments I also realized that I do have several unnecessary sentences that doesn't add up to my story. This ultimately ruined some of the sentence fluency, better off without them. Noticing there aren't as much mistakes made as before, I am also proud of my improvement. It was a good experience to write a narrative, because there were many ideas that I was able to write about.