POV+soundofwaves-change+personally+johnjung

Point of view When the book starts I was able to know that it was the 3rd person’s point of view. It seemed like it was describing all the background and to make the readers know some fundamental information they had to know before the story starts. Also telling the geography, not mentioning who him/herself is and not even a character gave me a hint that it was based in 3rd person’s point of view. “Uta-Jima- Song Island- has only about fourteen hundred inhabitants and a coastline of something under the three miles. The island has two spots with surpassingly beautiful views. One is Yashiro Shrine, which faces northwest and stands near the crest of the island. The shrine commands an uninterrupted view of the wide expanse of the Gulf of Ise, and the island lies directly in the straits connecting the gulf with the Pacific Ocean. The Chita Peninsula approaches from the north, and the Atsumi Peninsula stretches away to the northeast. To the west you can catch glimpses of the coastline between the ports of Uji-Yamada and Yokkaichi in Tsu.”-page 1

This is the changed version that I wrote again. “I, the daughter of the lighthouse keeper, was standing at the far end of the pire, holding a Boston bag. People call me unsociable, returning to the island after a long absence, disliked having the islanders greet and speak to me. I never wore a trace make up and my face was made all the more inconspicuous by the plain, dark brown suit I was wearing. There was something about the cheerful, slapdash way my dingy features were thrown together that might have appealed to some. But stantly perverse way, insisted upon thinking of myself as unattractive. Until now this was the most noticeable result of the “refinements” I was learning at the university in Tokyo. But probably the way I brooded over my commonplace face as being so unlovely was just as presumptuous as if I had been convinced I was an utter beauty.”