W.+Shakespeare+Revision.

Revising (not editing) using the 6-traits:

What did the author do well overall? - She did an excellent job explaining what Shakespeare did in his point of view. I could clearly see that she wrote about Elizabethan England.

What could the author improve overall? -She could have put a little more effort into the essay to make it sound better and easy to understand.

Ideas and Content:

1. Does the author clearly state the main idea of the paper in the first paragraph? What is the main idea? -I could not figure it out in the first paragraph but I figured out as it went on. The main idea was explaining the Elizabethan England.

Explain why the main idea is or is not clear: - It was not clear because she talked about what Shakespeare worked on and wrote few about the Elizabethan England.

2. Do the middle paragraphs develop / gives examples to support the topic / main ideas? - Yes. Does each supporting paragraph develop one idea or example? -Not really but yes. Do any paragraphs need clarification or expansion? -yes.. especially the first one need expansion

3. Does the ending bring the paper to a satisfactory close? Explain how the ending works or does not work: - yes, but it might be better to include more additional information to it.

Organization:

1. Are there any parts of the paper that should be reordered? Explain: - yes, on the first paragraph, she might want to explain the topics of first, second, and third paragraph.

2. Do the transitions in the paper work? Is there an over use of “and, so, but, then, or”? - no.

Sentence Fluency:

1. Are there rambling and/or confusing sentences? Fix two and put a star next to the two you improved. - yes, there are few confusing sentences.

2. Does the author use a variety of sentence lengths? Attempt to combine some sentences using a semi-colon or a comma and coordinating conjunction. -no, but there are some different sentence lengths.

Citing Sources:

1. Highlight all the in-text citations 2. Does the author use in-text citations for any information that is not common knowledge or is a direct quotation? 3. Are there any sentences or sections that don’t sound like the author’s work? Fix these or cite these as necessary. Don’t be a plagiarist! 4. Does the author have a works cited list in MLA format? Check the wiki for links to MLA citation information.