Narrative+--+Ian

General Comments: The thesis and story are very clear, understandable, and relatable.

Word choice and grammar need improvement. The perspective and tense switch about, as well.

1. Yes.

2. The thesis is the idea that events can have sharp turns that change what had been an unhappy experience into a pleasant memory.

3. The story puts the thesis into a context that is very familiar and makes it easier to understand.

4. Yes, sir.

5. I can't really seem to get a read on what the key event is. Every event is given equal weight and none really stand out.

6. Not at this time.

7. No, sir.

8. No, as they do not exist.

9-10. What?

1-2.

3. They were at the top of the food chain like veritable sharks among mere minnows.

4. He'll get those patterns at some point.